Return to Simply Haiku
Entry Page
Background
Image Gallery
Previous Image
Next Image ![]()
|
no
words kirsty karkow, USA an'ya: I like this haiku because of it's emotional impact, and the thought that almost any rocking chair has the ability to remind us of a baby or of our own childhood. The author further enhances this photo image by mentioning the silence, thereby letting us hear the soft sound of a child nursing. So many possibilities that this haiku makes the photo speak me as a reader, extending it to another level. |
love
letters . . . Ron C. Moss, Australia soji: This appeals to me because it alludes to things found in attics, without being a description of the photo so enhances the photo without describing it. As an added bonus it is a haiku that can stand on its own, but does gain an emotional boost by being coupled with the photo. I would prefer to see an "em" dash instead of the ellipses, but that's just my preference |
attic
light Marjorie Buettner, USA an'ya: This haiku was my first choice because it started out with a wide setting "attic light", then zoomed down to the "arms of the rocking chair", which in the light, could be seen as "worn thin". The author stayed away from describing what kind of rocking chair or whose rocking chair (old, new, wood, grandma's, father's, etc), which I think was wise insofar as the photo already shows the type/age of this rocking chair, and the readers can conjur up their own different images of who once sat in it. an'ya: I would suggest |
|
Old
rocking chair Zhanna P. Rader, USA an'ya: This haiku is not only very "real" insofar as the author's use of "deserted, trashed house", interestingly, it's gives readers a "window-gazing" look "inside" that attic. This is an out-of-the-ordinary perspective that I enjoyed very much. an'ya: I would suggest dropping one adjective: old rocking chair |
mice,
memories Doris Pearson , USA soji: I like this one for the humorous irony and giving us a look inside and outside that dusty attic, depth. Another stands alone haiku that gains by the joining with the photo, and vice versa. Another plus with this one is the meter, not a requirement, but nice. |
slowly
in the chair Jen Badstuebner, Australia soji: This one could have been my number 1 or 2 for the concept behind it, but I have problems with the syntax. If it had been: forgotten rocker either of which use the photo, but aren't dependent on it, and have a nice emotional touch without being maudlin. or slowly filling which, unfortunately would only work with the photo. |
spring
sun Beverley George, Australia an'ya: I would give this one an honorable mention. |